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Twinis
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 5:29 pm    Post subject: Some Fiction Reply with quote

I'd like to invite anyone and everyone that would like to read a bit of fiction to take a look here.

http://www.grammatoneve.com/forum/viewforum.php?forum_id=13

The posts by me are a chronicle of fiction about Twinis and her experiences that make up the background story of the person she is today. As none of my corp mates are avid roleplayers, I thought I'd ask here for a read. Smile

They are in chronological order from oldest to newest and follow the same storyline from one chapter to the next. The rapid timeline changes confused some of my corp mates. hehe.

(And honestly, I'd totally ignore Nomad's stories.. they make my eyes and head hurt tbh, but maybe I'm just an asshole)
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Artemacus
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 9:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Quote:
“Nomad, wake-up, you having nightmares again” spoke Lacey Black as she shaked Nomad awake.


I think I must be an asshole too. What a way to start....

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Twinis
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 9:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Razz you were warned. hehe.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Count me in on the asshole brigade. I managed to get about 4 paragraphs into "Nomad's Folly". I can give the man kudos for proper use of an apostrophe, but that's about it...

I like your stories, Twinis. They are a bit disjointed, though. I know the effect you're trying to go for - kinda a John Brunner/Shockwave Rider thing, but sometimes the transitions are a little too unexplained to really follow. Who's Cleric, for instance. He seems to be the protagonist at times, but it's unclear. A little more description of the people in the stories would be welcome, as well. All in all, though, they're really enjoyable reads. Keep it up!
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Twinis
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The cleric is Twinis. And honestly, she is a bit of a protagonist. I've got the idea in my head, hard to get it out in text.. however, I am revamping the previously written pieces slightly to better reflect the transitions and connect them better. Plus I wanna have a nice PDF with pictures if I ever learn to be artistic. lol. Still a work in progress I got at least 5 more chapters before the whole story is explained.

Ultimately, everything will tie into the first chapter when it's done and possibly reordered a bit.

Thanks for the comments though, I appreciate them and take them as guidance.
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 11, 2006 7:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Actually the reason his head and eyes hurts is the thought of me making out with me. Nomad is my primary character where Lacey is my alt. So the thought of that makes him shudder.
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 12, 2006 8:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Love your sig man. Laughing
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 12, 2006 10:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I must confess I have the atistic talents of a turnip. Twinis did the sig for me as a favor for something I did for him.
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 12, 2006 1:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

slurp slurp
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